※ 引述《corson (浪人剑客)》之铭言： : Book title: Forgiveness, Dalai Lama’s life wisdom 2 : This is a book about religion first, a related Tibet 1.其实应该先厘清：你在这里用first的目的何在？想表达什麽？ 如果只是想说「首先」的话，那不加也可以。 其实我觉得，除非你有明确的列点讨论， 不然以论文而言，这种虚词不加反而好。 2."a related Tibet..."不顺，我会写成 a story related to a Tibetan Buddhist leader 或 a story about.... "Tibetan"是Tibet的形容词用法。 : Buddhist leader story. I read the book because I would : like to know the idea about "virtuality." (or no-self, 空无) : Through the book, Dalai-lama would like to expound two 1.would like是比较委婉的用法，其实不妨直接用want， 以学术论文来讲，用"intended to"会更漂亮。 2.Dalai lama应该两个字首都大写：Dalai Lama 其实这一点应该没有严格的规定，只是我google了一下， 发现大家都是这样用的。 : topics: virtuality and kindness. The "virtuality" is 这里的"virtuality"可以不必加定冠词了， 因为你没有好几个"virtuality需要去做限定。 : not easy to understand, and its state is as following: 1."virtuality"本身没有办法"understand"， 能understand的是「人」，所以应该用被动用法： Virtuality is not easy to be understood. 2.「如下」应该是as follows， 用as following的话，感觉後面还要加东西才对， 因为following是形容词用法。 : Everything is dependent on other things, and the matter 这里的"matter"是指什麽？用"the"限定了， 感觉前面似乎曾经提过这个"matter"，但其实并没有。 这句其实可以这样写： Everything is dependent on other things, and nothing exists alone in the world. （不过我其实更想写成： Everything is dependent on others; nothing is independent from others. ） : does not exist alone in the world. It is like a net, and : every node will reflect each other. The concept is similar 这里不必用未来式，因为你说的是个「事实、真理、现状」， 用现在式即可。不要被中文的「每个点都『会』...」的「会」给骗了。 : with the butterfly effect. The "kindness"is still not easy similar "to". 这是片语的固定用法，介系词没法换。 : to say, but author hold many examples of Dalai-lama in the 1."not easy to say"跟前面的"not easy to understand"是一样的问题。 2.记得冠词：the author (of the book)。author有很多，需要限定。 3.hold?你是要说「举出」吗？我会用give， 还有，注意时态问题。就算是hold也应该改成held或holds。 : book. It can be also found that the kindness of Dalai-lama 这里用了that，我就期待後面接个子句，但却只出现了名词片语。 这句这样写会比较好： The kindness of Dalai Lama can be found everywhere in the book. : everywhere of book. For example, author asked Dalai-lama 一样，"the" author。 : that "Do not you hate the Chinese who kill your Tibet people Tibet people可用Tibetan : and ruined your temple." Dalai-lama replied that "Not at all, 1.引号里是问句，标点应该用问号结尾。 2.後面的引述句比较常这样写： Dalai Lama replied, "Not at all..." : probably the behavior was made by someone. But if he rid of 1."Not at all"跟後面一句其实没有关系，用句点结束比较好。 2.probably摆这个位置的话，後面加个逗点比较好， 不然应该写成这样： the behavior was probably made by someone. 3.rid of 是指？我比较常看到get rid of，还有，注意时态。 : the behavior, I don’t need to hate the person." : Author described that Dalai-lama laugh loud when Dalai-lama ^^^^^时态，该用过去式。 : saw the author's goatee at first contact. I thought Dalai-lama ︿加个their会清楚些。 : should has real temperament, and there is another event impressed 1.real temperament是指「真性情」吗？ 可是我看到这个词的第一个反应是：Is there "false" temperament? 你想表达的，应该比较接近genuine这个字吧？ 2.there is another event "that/which" impressed me. 这个关系代名词不能省略。 : me. That was "64 Tien An Men Event" in China. Tibet and China 六四天安门事件，用英文维基查查看。 英文是说June-Fourth Incident或Tienanmen Square Protest in 1989 你这样写，我会误解成六十四个男人参加了什麽大活动 XD : government were preparing to build a communicated channel at 沟通管道：a channel for communication。 或用「沟通平台」：a platform for communication。 : that time. But after the event, Dalai-lama wanted her diplomacy : official to address a harshest condemnation. He said: "I knew diplomacy official?你要说的是diplomatic agent 或是diplomatic personnel吧？ : we expected the communication. But if I didn’t do so, I will ^^^^^^^^^^^^^ 这里是「与过去事实相反的假设」，该写： But if I hadn't done so, I wouldn't have had 或 ...I wouldn't have been qualified to... : not have the qualification to talk the freedom and the rights ^^^^^^^^ talk about freedom or human rights. 很基本的介系词用法，要注意。 : of man." When I read this paragraph, I was touched deeply. 我会说"I was deeply touched"。 : From this book, I can know Dalai-lama more, and modified some 这里的can应该不必加。 : negative and wrong impression at same time. The book state many 1. at "the" same time 2. the book stated 3. ideas about virtuality : "virtuality" idea. If you are interested in this, maybe you can : also read it. : I checked the article by Word, hope can give me some comments. ^^ with MS Word : Thank you. 有练习就有进步喔，加油～ --

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