作者physheepy ()
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标题Re: [写作班]azure0116, Christmas
时间Sun Dec 23 00:12:25 2007
※ 引述《azure0116 (冲阿.炫风冲峰)》之铭言:
: I began to remember the old memory about my first love.
recollect
: Acctually she didnt love me as I love her. Like my father said,"
didn't did.
: the things in the world you can't acquire always tempt you
get
: most."I guess it's a kind of the human natures.
X nature
: In 2000, December 24, I was the second grade of my
On December 24th,2000, in (my去除)
(建议日期+th)
: junior high school. There's a beautiful girl sat in front of
was sitting
: me,I having been caring for her for months. Since December 24
and I had
: was the last chace for me to ask her out, I decided that I must
chance
: try my atmost to ask for dating her. At the moon break finally I
?????
: courageously asked her out. She accept my invitation. At the
accepted
: moment I felt an overwhelming joy first appeared in my life.
appearing
: We met at the Taipei MRT station first. I took her to my
: favorite restaurant. Then we went to 淡水 to enjoy the beauteous
: sunset. I really knew of your kindness because seeing you bought
her?? when her buy
: a 爱心铅笔. We had a good time at that day. When I said good bye
on
: to her in my mind I decided to ask her out again, fantasizing
加逗号 imagining
(fantasize:to imagine you are doing something which is very unlikely to happen)
: that in the process of time we may become a couple.
we may become a couple in the future.
: Unluckily, fortune doesnt smiles on me. She didnt care for me
However doesn't smile didn't like
: as I did. We could only be friend. The thing intenses my
friends.What adding to the
: suffering was our photographic momery on Cristmas.
photographs Christmas Eve.
: Although many years passed by, I still missed the girl.
: I was ambivalent about a loveless lover on every
: Christmas,missing her terribly, remembering her cruelty,
recollecting +and
: thinking about that she flashed the first smile at me in my
: life.
: *----------------------
: 以下为疑惑^^
: 有些逗号+动名词是用分词构句@@ 不知道用的对不对!
: (约xxx出来只能用 ask XX out 吗?)
: 爱心铅笔不知道怎麽拼 (那种台北车站附近路上一直叫你买的)
charity pencil? I'm not sure.
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1F:推 azure0116:thx alot 12/23 14:55
※ 编辑: physheepy 来自: 60.250.197.203 (12/24 15:50)
2F:→ physheepy:补充 care for 通常用作照顾 我建议你把这个片语换掉 12/24 15:54
3F:推 dvlin:care for当成喜欢或爱也是很常用的喔 全看前後文意 12/27 08:15