※ 引述《iris0542 (gg)》之铭言： : 我试着改看看喔 不对的请大家指正~~^^ : (厉害厉害第一篇christmas!!) : ※ 引述《effervescenc (Waltz of Flowers)》之铭言： : : Christmas, as we know, came from the western society but becomes : : the worldwide holiday of the world in recent years. In my memory, : 我觉得第一句用became比较好,时态比较一致 我觉得用has become会比较好 另外，came from也可改用originated from : in recent years改recently,因为前句有未来的感觉 in recent years应该没问题 (如果前面是用has become就更没有不明确性) : : the traditional way to celebrate the Christmas is trough exchanging : 这边不用the through : : cards, sending gifts or holding a Christmas Party. : : The recent financial market turmoil caused by the American mortgage losses : : had made a big impact to the celebration of Christmas. has? : : Fortunately, most of the businessmen are very considerate, : and they sell : : many cheaper products such as toys and electronic equipments. : : For example, “ASUS” has invented a little pack of notebook called "EEPC" ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ 这个用法很奇怪，不如说 a small-sized notebook? : : It is not only easier to carry but most important it is almost the same : cheaper (that) : : price as a high class mobile. : 我会写 its price is almost the same as a high class mobile : : It’s hard for me to spend so much money to celebrate Christmas with my : : friends and my family. This year, we plan to hold a different party at home : : The title of our party is called “Fondu Party". fondue的拼法 : : You can say that it is no : not 或"it is nothing special" 也可以 : : special, because we just celebrate with eating together. : you don't need comma ^Chritmas : : That’s right, but for us it’s a big progress. : : We have searched from the websites for cookbooks of how to : 不要from recipes : : make a delicious fondu. It’s a swiss form of fondu. : swiss放到fondu前面? (这个我很不确定~~) a Swiss style fondue : : For those guys who have never been into the kitchen, it’s really : : special and exciting, isn’t it? : : Hope all of you also have a good plan to celebrate the Christmas and : 不要the : : don’t forget to have fun, too. : : ---------------------- : : 敬请指教，谢谢 小改一点:) Great job you guys, on the writing and the editing! -- 一个 学术英文写作 领域的讨论板 在 PTT （telnet:ptt.cc〉 【 分组讨论区 】 --> 11 国家研究院 政治, 文学, 学术 --> 科学学术研究院 --> ★ST-English PTT 学术英文/论文写作班 --

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