※ 引述《kfsfat (kfsfat)》之铭言： : 耶我抢头香先写完喔，版主要帮奖励一下 : 有关於这个主题，其实我觉得有很多方向可以写，像我就有想到两个。 : 第一是写关於台风来时，应该准备哪些东西，例如食物，收音机..等等。 : 另外一个是想到台风来时可能发生的灾害以及後续影响。 : 不过我选择第二个，写的时候发现并不是像我想像的那麽容易，所以看起来可能会有点 : boring， : 麻烦大家欣赏了 : The influences of the typhoons when they are coming : Even though millions of dollars are spent each year on predicting : typhoons, the disasters continue to make headline news. When the typhoon : is approaching, even after it is away from here, the calamity is not : as simple as what we thought. 对不起，我不太懂这边not as simple as what we thought想要表达什麽? : While the typhoon is coming, first, as a result of heavy rain, a lot of When a typhoon comes... (generalization,现在简单式) : the buildings are toppled, the houses are buried because of the mudslides, xxx xxx (可以用by) xxx : as well as the major roads are blocked with rubbles in the countryside ^^^^^^^^^^ xxx by and : of the city. xxxxxxxxxxx 概括所有台风，用现在简单式，好几个the都不要加。 最後of the city删掉，因为乡下本来就是相对於城市，不需要说「城市的乡下」。 "in the countrysides"可以移到roads和are的中间，以避免混淆， 因为被它修饰的名词是roads，而不是rubbles。 : Second, crops, vegetables, everything about agricultures, the productions : decrease very much. The price is going to become higher. vegetables是crops的一种喔，不是两项完全分开的东西；农业产品可称作 agricultural products; very much可以改用别的副词例如drastically。 "Second, crops and all agricultural products decrease drastically, and the prices become much higher." : Finally, the governments need to spend much money on rescuing , repairing government needs ^ trapped or missing people : the roads, and so on. All the costs cause the economic condition : to go worse. ^^^^^^^^^ to become worse. 正式写作要尽量避免用to go代替to become : (最後一句可以用未来式写成这样吗? The economic condition is going to be worse.) 还是用现在简单式比较好 : Although we are able to predict the typhoon while it is approaching, to predict an approaching typhoon... : its influence still strikes our country every time. 另一个这里适用的字是"impact" : All kind of the architectures and the traffic roads are destroyed, : the productions of the agricultures are decay, the economy becomes worse. ^^^^^^^^ ^and decay的过去分词是decayed，但是这里用decay这个字眼并不很适合。 Buildings and roads are destroyed, agricultural production decreases, and the economy becomes worse. : These are all bad influences when the typhoon is coming. 一篇文章最好能有更明确、更强力的结尾。 我可能会把最後一句改成 The typhoon always brings disastrous impacts to our country. --

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