※ 引述《dvlin (Dee)》之铭言： : ※ 引述《kfsfat (kfsfat)》之铭言： : : 这是我完成的文章，里面提到的方法只是写作时随便呼?的，仅供参考用 : : 请大家欣赏一下吧，感谢 : : Plan of learning English well : : English, indeed, it is the most useful languages all over the world. Even : ^^^^^^^ ^^ ^^^^^^^^^ : 主词出现两次了 it删掉 主词是单数 所以这边是language : (or "one of the most useful languages") : : though most of us were enforced on studying it since we were in the elementary : forced to study : : school, however, we still cannot use it very well. Main factor is we did not : ^^^^^^^^ ^The : however 和even though语意重复 删掉however : : have enough time to practice it. : 另外，把"被逼着学"关连到"学得好不好"似乎是有点奇怪的逻辑 : 有人会争论说，如果你是被逼去学的，你就不会喜欢它，所以当然学不好， : 但是这跟你的文章无关。建议可以改成: : "Even though most of us have been studying English since elementary school, : we still cannot use it very well." (relating 学了多久 and 用得好不好) : 然後最後一句延续时态 改成"The main factor is we do not..." : : For this reason, there are two recommendations as follows: : : First, for reading and writing, I would like to choose reading materials : ^^^* : : which I like. Through reading articles, we can be familiar with the usage of : ^^* : : vocabularies, grammars, as well as how to write the sentence more clearly. : vocabulary grammar sentences : : Meanwhile, choosing a headline as same as the article that you read, and : ^^^* : : writing it. At last, asking someone to correct. : 这两句没有主词 是不完整句子 : * 这篇文章一开始是写你(作者)的学习计画,到後面却越来越像给读者的指示 : 建议你每一句都用"I..."(前者)或"You..."(後者,) : : All I mentioned above is based on practicing. : (下一段就几乎都是"You..."了) : : Second, for listening and speaking, both of them can be practiced at the : : same time.Searching for materials you like, such as movies, music…etc. In your : ^^^^^^ : "movies, music, etc." : : free time, you can communicate with friends who also want to practice it. : : In conclusion, I would like to emphasize again, speaking is loud than : : action. By practicing it, you can understand what the wrong you spoke, : ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ : : written, made, after that, correct it. This is the most efficient way : ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ : "what mistakes you have made" : : to learn English. : It is very nice that you tried to use many different types of sentences : to make your article interesting! But be careful, as your thoughts : were leaping (跳跃思考), you may lose unity (文章前後的一致性). : I used to have the same problem. It took a while to get rid of. :) 喔..实在太感谢你的帮忙了...连续帮我改了两篇像小学生的作文 以後可能会多po文章上来，请你(包含大家)别见怪， 然後另外有一件事请想跟你说一下，因为我想充分利用这个版练习写作，但是我知道 大家没有义务一定要帮我改文章，所以如果以後你有看到我po文章，不用急着改， 有控在帮我改，不然我会不好意思勒。 回归正题..关於你提出来我的错误..实在收获良多阿..不过还是有几点想提出来跟你讨论 1.有关於我文章所使用的enforce 以及你帮我修改的force两者用法，我查字典好像说 force好像比较像是略即到法律方面的事情，所以我的用法好像比叫ok。不过我最後还是 采用你最後帮我修改的句子，我觉得你讲的很有道理。 2.有关於etc用法，好像我的也没错，你的也没错，不过我明天会去地球村补习， 我在跟老师确认一下吧。 3.你所谓前後文的一致性我了解你想传达给我的意思，但是我不太懂你说我的文章跳 跃思考，可否请你从我文章中选出一句有跳跃思考的句子吗，这样也许我可能可以了解 比较透彻。 感谢你罗.... 你是高雄人吗...若是的话我可以请你喝饮料..哈哈 --

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