※ 引述《kfsfat (kfsfat)》之铭言： : 这是我的文章..麻烦大家了 : Recalling the first time used computers in elementary school at age of 11, : it becomes an essential implement in my daily life till right now. 有几个地方要注意上下句的主词、时态一致性 "used... becomes" 过去式->现在式 可以改用完成式 Since + I used... (过去发生的事) + it has become... "till right now"已经包含在 since的意思里面了 可以精简掉 "computers... it" 复数->单数 建议用"the" computer 用一个电脑代替所有的电脑 "Recalling... it" 上句没有主词，是一个dependent clause (subordinate clause) 用来形容下句的主词。 但是在进行"recall"这个动作的人是你，不是 it (computer) 整句可以改成 "Since the first time I used the computer in elementary school at the age of 11, it has become an essential implement in my daily life." : Computers, doubtless, plays an important role as people pursue more and more : knowledge as well as the development of the modern technology. ^^^不加定冠词 另外，"plays a role in..." 也是一个常用的句法 例句: "Computers play an important role in our pursuit of knowledge and the development of modern technology." : Through the computer, connecting to the Internet, it is not easy : to image how wonderful this virtual world is. imagine : Entering the website of Wikipedia, google, and so on, you can search whatever ^^^^^^ 这边要用search for search (location) for (object) search Google for information : you desperately want to figure out. For engineers, it also useful for their ^is : tedious researches which need complicated calculations even more simulations. ^and : By the efficiency of the computer which helps people to deal with the : questions, it fulfils our technologic aspiration (desire, wish). : PS(上面空格我不知道要用哪个单字比较好，麻烦指教) 这样写法有点乱 写科英尽量使用简单有条理的句子就好 比较不容易出错，也比较好读 "The efficiency of computers helps us (to) deal with our questions, and fultils our desire for technology." : Finally, the development of the computer is faster and faster. It does not : only let us gain the information and the knowledge, but also brings us to the ^^^ ^^^两个都不加定冠词 : future world. It is nothing to say that computer surely occupies an important ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^不太懂这里意思 : position in our daily lifes. "occupies... position" 感觉好像太literal 像是说有一个实体的地点 最後这句其实就说 "Surely, the computer has an important place in our everyday lives." 这样简单就可以了。 --

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