※ 引述《brendonfish (fish)》之铭言： : ※ 引述《mingtai1 (snake)》之铭言： : : I have been working in an academic institute since my graduation : : two years ago. I majored in computer science, and sometimes I write : ^^^^^^^^^这里使用 sometimes, : 会让我联想到其他时候你的工作是？ : 建议写成 My major is computer science, : therefore I write customized application software 请问为什麽用therefore? major in computer science & write application 并没有 绝对关系，用and 似乎较为恰当? : after school. : : applications according to customers' demands. During these days, : : I realized that a person should not have only one skill, and I realized : 这样写如何呢？ a person with only one skill is not competitive, and ... : 建议把这句断开，然後重新选择连接词让语意连贯。 : : the fact that programming cannot be a forever career for me, so I learned : ^. Therefore, : : English a lot and took TOEIC exam and hope I would be able to work in : ^^^^^^^^^ such that 同样: I learned English a lot and took TOEIC exam such that I would be able to work....为什麽要用such that? : : foreign companies for my next job and hopefully I can have the opportunities : ^. Then I have the opportunities ... 其实感觉起来修改完以後就不是原作者要表达的意思.... : : to work abroad for my company so that I can visit scenic spots : ^^^^^^^^^^^^^ and visit ... : : around the world. : 个人意见， : 给你参考。 --

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