※ 引述《biolenz (lenz)》之铭言： : A chemical based keeping fit method, BowNiSo, for losing weight 记得要用hyphen。 A chemical-based method for keeping fit : The overweight of body has been proved to have high risk involved 1."The overweight of body"有obesity，肥胖症这个字可以用。 2. to have high risk involved in有点怪， 我会用a major risk factor for cardiac diseases<--要用复数 : in cardiac disease. In social consideration, the bad body shape also makes ^^^ I would say "poor" : people to be unconfident. However, to date, no effective method for keeping ^^^^^可以省略。 : fit is applied. ^^^^^^^^^^这样讲的感觉，似乎是「有方法，可是大家不用」 : By a novel keeping fit (KT) method, BowNiSo, the decreasing of fat in 1.decrease可以直接当名词，不必用动名词。 2.abdominal fat更好。 : abdomen during the treatment was observed by magnetic resonance image (MRI). : This method was based on seiral natural products which isolated from the deep ^^^这是事实，可以用现在式。 ^^要用被动，不然就去掉 seiral是指？a series of? which : sea anemone to control people not to eat fried chicken. ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^可用keep people from eating... : People who tested in this method shown that they all lose weight 1.People who "were" tested，不然就用People tested 其实还有更好的字：Subjects，受试者。 2.shown是过去分词，你要说的是showed吗？ 2.they all "lost" significant weight during "the three-week" ... : in significant during 3 weeks experiment. The rate of losing fat was 5-fold : higher comparing to the control. 5-fold，是说five times吗？还是fivefold? : This results suggest that KT is a good method for losing weight, may ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^数的问题 ^^^^^ 是These results suggest还是This result suggests？ 要and : be used as a alternative method in current medicine. While the mechanism of ^^^^^^建议用"However," : the chemicals used in KT needed to be explored in the future. ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ 可用requies further exploration in the future. 请参考:) --

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