※ 引述《HIbaby (嗨北鼻)》之铭言： (恕删) : 文章 : -------------------------------------------------------------------- : Several materials - such as leaf, cloth or kraft paper- : provide for cleaning in bathroom. 1. leaf建议改为leaves，或the leaf 2. cleaning可以加上personal 3. provide 可以不用加for。provide for的用法是provide a for b 为b提供a。 : Kraft paper have a benefit character, cheap, ^^^这里建议加上"that is,"，用句点结尾。 : however, the skin touch and the water absorb ability is not so good. 1. 这里建议另起一句。 2. skin touch是不是用sense of touch比较好？ 3. water absorb ability建议改成the abilitiy of water absorption 本来想用absorbability，可是查了一下，这个字似乎指的是「可吸附性」， 看看有没有专业人士来回答好了^^ : The length of fibers in paper materials determined comfortable skin touch. 这是事实，所以可以用现在式determine。 : Here, we development a novel structure style of paper, named toilet paper, 1. development是名词，应该用developed。 2. novel structure style of paper? 不太懂这个意思。 3. "named..."我会用 "named as 'toilet paper'."耶。 好像也没什麽理由，可是就觉得这样比较顺... : which were constructed by short type fibers. 1. 这里也是事实，所以应该也可以用are constructed 2. short type fibers? 是不是可以直接讲short fibers？ : We provide the toilet paper in schools and department stores : to estimate using feeling from user and analysis the water absorption. 1. to estimate?这是「估计」的意思。你是要说explore吗？ 2. 前半句我会写成to explore users' feeling after use 3. analysis是名词，应该是analyze。 4. 不太了解为什麽这边还要分析吸水力？ : From the questionary results, 你是要说questionnaire吗？问卷？ 那应该说results of the questionnaires : 99% people feel very good compared to past experience. ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ 建议改为good, comparing to... past experience用"their past experiences"较好。 : Toilet paper can absorb water 10 times faster then kraft paper. : Toilet paper may provide a new choice for people in bathroom. 1. 比较级要用than不是then喔。 2. 两句主词都是toilet paper，後面那句就可以用it代替， 也可以用关系代名词结合，句型就会更漂亮： Toilet paper, which can absorb water 10 times faster than kraft paper, may provide a new choice for people in bathrooms. 请参考罗。 --

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