作者miniko70 (胧月夜)
看板Oversea_Job
标题Re: [请益] 麻烦各位帮我看下cover letter
时间Sun Mar 24 22:14:36 2013
好了.. 经过各位板友的指点+参考了一些网站的sample
我砍掉重练了一个新的版本
改掉improve my English..一些词语 还有一些怪异的文法
麻烦大家再帮我看下了..如果有什麽更好的写法,也请再告诉我了
感谢各位m(_ _)m
MY NAME
1F., No.15, Xxx Rd., Xxx Dist.,
Taipei City, Taiwan
886-0000-000-000
March 22, 2013
Ms. Lily Lee
Personnel Manager
XXX Corporation
Dear Ms. Lee,
I was very excited to see your vacancy for a web developer position which was
advertised on the job123 website.
Having several years experience in the industry. I love building website, and
I hope it is popular with everyone. This is a perfect career which bring
me enthusiasm and satisfaction. I am finding a web development and overseas
job which can broaden my horizons and utilising my experience, knowledge and
skills to benefit a company. My related experience as follows.
* Knowledge of PHP OOP Programming, MVC Framework and MySQL.
* Coding using front-end technologies, such as HTML, CSS, JavaScript, jQuery.
* Familiar with NetBeans, Enterprise Architect, UML, SVN, XAMPP etc.
* Welcome new challenges and learning new skills.
I invite you to review my works of site
(
http://xxx.xxx.com) . It will show you that I am a capable and professional
individual.
As you can see from my enclosed resume both of Chinese and English for your
reference. Thank you for your time and consideration, I am looking forward to
hearing from you soon.
Yours faithfully,
MY NAME
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1F：推 smi1e:主要都是英文跟文法的问题,CV的表达上很ok了.. 03/25 01:04
2F：→ smi1e:找个人帮你改英文就好了:) 03/25 01:04
3F：→ umum29:恩 我觉得差不多了 开始准备其他部分吧~ 加油 03/25 03:15
4F：推 dobb:good like your attitude 03/25 17:02
5F：→ miniko70:那我就放心了 谢谢大家^^! 03/26 17:12
6F：→ soncan:用英文写一篇cover letter的确挑战，不知道你的读者语文 03/28 13:31
7F：推 soncan:能力与背景如何？我感觉你已充分流露出对这个领域热忱， 03/28 13:33
8F：推 soncan:但是Perfect,enthusiasm,satisfaction 这几个字还无法帮助 03/28 13:35
9F：推 soncan:我了解你为什有热忱，到底是web develop中的那些过程或结果 03/28 13:37
10F：推 soncan:带给你什麽感受ex.成就感,自我挑战,解决问题,从中学到新知 03/28 13:39
11F：推 soncan:等,（我随便举例）,是我会把这些写出,be more specific， 03/28 13:42
12F：→ soncan:让人知道你跟这个领域独特个人化的连结 03/28 13:43
13F：推 soncan:加油，若有冒犯,还希望你见谅^^| 03/28 13:48
14F：推 doki777:可以写dear hiring manager, 收到履历的人会很开心 03/28 14:11
15F：→ miniko70:OK好的~谢谢S大的指点哦!用这些来形容可能有点太抽象了 03/28 14:48
16F：→ miniko70:那我再多增加一点具体的描述好了~thank u^^! 03/28 14:48
17F：→ miluco:文法有许多错误，看起来不是很顺畅，可以找英文系的帮忙改 03/29 03:07
18F：→ miluco:一下,比方说finding job > 用looking for a position就好一 03/29 03:08
19F：→ miluco:一点 03/29 03:09
20F：→ miniko70:好的 谢谢\\(难怪履历虽然被人资开了但都还没找我面试 凹 03/30 00:07