作者Chiwaku (诗人依赖着月亮)
看板Language
标题Re: [文法] 帮我修改文法...
时间Sat Sep 8 16:19:52 2007
※ 引述《fleuve (宅宅 :D)》之铭言:
: ※ 引述《metea (metea)》之铭言:
: : Leon is waked up by his father on seven-thirty in the morning. They have a
: : plan on this holiday--have a picnic in the park today. First, they arrive the
: : park, Leon's mother brings a lot of food, drinks for them. They sit on grass
: : and enjoy these delicious food. In the afternoon , Leon and his father play
: : frisbee, his sister fly a kite. They will been happy a day.
: : 帮我看看文法
: : 谢谢!
: Leon was woken up by his father on seven-thirty in the morning. They
: had a plan today─(to have) a picnic in park / They had a plan to have a
: picnic in park today. Leon's mother brought with her a lot of food and
: drinks when they arrived the park. They sat on the grass and enjoyed the
: delicious food. In the afternoon, Leon and his father played frisbee
: together, his sister flying a kite. It was a very happy day for them/
: It has been a very wonderful day for them/They were very happy today.
: 有错请指正, thanks! :)
Leon was woken up by his father at seven thirty this morning. They have
made a plan for today -- to go on a picnic in the park. Leon's mother brought
with her a lot of food and drink. Then they arrived at the park, sat on the
grass, and began to enjoy the delicious food that Leon's mother brought here.
In the afternoon, Leon and his father played frisbee, and his sister flew
a kite. It has been a very happy day for them today.
This could look better :)
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1F:推 fleuve:哈哈 学长谢拉 :DD 09/08 16:29
2F:→ fleuve:It does look better~~ 09/08 16:30
3F:推 Chiwaku:You're welcome xuedi :D 09/08 17:36