※ 引述《metea (metea)》之铭言： : Leon is waked up by his father on seven-thirty in the morning. They have a : plan on this holiday--have a picnic in the park today. First, they arrive the : park, Leon's mother brings a lot of food, drinks for them. They sit on grass : and enjoy these delicious food. In the afternoon , Leon and his father play : frisbee, his sister fly a kite. They will been happy a day. : 帮我看看文法 : 谢谢! Leon was woken up by his father on seven-thirty in the morning. They had a plan today─(to have) a picnic in park / They had a plan to have a picnic in park today. Leon's mother brought with her a lot of food and drinks when they arrived the park. They sat on the grass and enjoyed the delicious food. In the afternoon, Leon and his father played frisbee together, his sister flying a kite. It was a very happy day for them/ It has been a very wonderful day for them/They were very happy today. 有错请指正, thanks! :) -- 然後有一天我ꄠ 靠在窗 前，会发现原来我是株 ╭╮──╪──╭╮ 不 ＊ fleuve ＊ 需要阳光的植物︴1mK︴30m直到有一天我闭上眼睛 ╰╯──╪──╰╯ 看不见自己、却可以看见你…ꄠ ♂ -- ※ 编辑: fleuve 来自: 125.225.70.101 (09/08 16:01)