引述《yooyoovicky (我喜欢你，你喜欢我吗？)》之铭言 : ____________我是第二篇_______________________________________________________ : In the present age, people are having a hard time suffering missing unique Nowadays, facing difficulties fighting against the : dialects and customs. It might result in some problems such as tradition vanishing of dialects and customs. traditions : disappearing, the sense of belonging changed and declining the disappeared the competitiveness of : competitiveness of local people. In this essay, I will analyze the factors local people declined. : regarding to this issue. : First of all, handy transport system dramatically improved people’s life. convenient transportation system has improved : Modern people only take a few hours to fly to other countries, the rapid fast moving : traffic allows different folks communicate more frequently. While people vehicles peoples : start to contact, the prevailing culture might affect or even erode the other contact one another : one. According to linguistic research, minority group would try to acquire : the bigger group’s language for communicating. By contrast, the big group On contrast : usually domain the higher social position. In most contact situations, the dominate In most situations, as people : stronger language speakers will increase and the weak one might lose their contact each other, the dominating language will be more widely used, and : confidence and the culture disappears in a not long period. speakers of small languages lose self confidence and the culture disappears not long thereafter. : The other factor should be taken into account is media. Nowadays, American ^that : and European countries broadcast their programs which including cultures, include : lifestyle and preference. Obviously, they influence million audiences’ mind lifestyles, preferences the mind of millions of the audience : and habits around the world, like Valentine’s Day, fast food. For another such as ^and Another such : instance, many people prefer watching Hollywood movies to local movies due to example is that, : the international starts and high technique. As a result, in small country, technology countries : no producer would like to invest in history recording. The local culture The local culture : sooner will be ignore and disappear. will be ignored. And sooner or later it will disappear. : To sum up, the reasons of losing languages and cultures are advanced To sum up, the development of transportation and media have caused languages : transport and media development. As far I am convinced that both of them to disappear. As far as I am concerned, both of them : boost the change of society. have caused the change of society. TR 6 CC 6 LR 5.5 GR 4.5 O 5.5 你没有离题的问题 但是记得每段结尾的时候要再把整段的重点阐述一次 你的连接词使用有问题造成你的文章不连贯 你的字汇量是够的 但是你非常不求甚解 你的句子常有结构上的问题造成理解上的困难 而且超多很明显的文法错误 --

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