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标题[问题] 作文task1 结论问题!!请高手给意见!!
时间Tue Mar 23 19:36:15 2010
task1 在下多半花20分钟写,留大约35分钟左右写task2
这篇是其中一次的练习文章
主要是说韩国人的整形数据等等!!
在下想要问的是,请问有需要多花5分钟写结论吗??
请问个位有写结论吗??
A glance at these two bar graphs reveals a number of cosmetic procedures
and specific types of surgery between male and female in Korea in 2004.
It is salient that the total number of the cosmetic surgery in female
outnumber in male. The largest number of procedures in female is Eyelid
surgery which is almost 320000. The most large number of surgery in male
is 60000 which is Hair Transplantation. On the other hand, the fewest number
of the cosmetic surgery among woman is the sort of Liposuction with the
total number about 120000. The most less number of the procedures
among man is the sort of Facelift with approximately 18000.
There are some coincidences between the two gender. Both man and woman like
to do the cosmetic surgery about Laser Skin Resurfacing and Rhinoplasty.
In comparison with these two types of surgery in two gender, and base
on the proportion of the two numbers of surgery, female is more like to do
the Rhinoplasty surgery. However,
male prefer to do the Laser Skin Resurfacing.
在下这周六就要上战场了!!请个位前辈给点意见吧!!感谢!!!
作文task1 结论问题!!请高手给意见!!
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1F:→ hpat:有甚麽写甚麽~ 最後做一个对於图形的整体 03/23 22:24
2F:→ hpat:但是以前去高雄UKEAS 老师喜欢要我们把总结写在前面 03/23 22:25
3F:→ cacia:写在前面?是首段对整篇文章的介绍吗?? 03/24 08:46
4F:→ hpat:是写在介绍後 针对Task1的"概括句"或是"两图"的彼此关系 03/24 22:42
5F:→ cacia:所以结尾不用特地在描述瞜!! 03/25 00:00