※ 引述《jt910203 (aa)》之铭言： : 这边作文的题目是要写 : 1.运动的好处 : 2.你最喜欢做什麽运动,为什麽？ : There are many advantages for us to do exercise every day. First, we can keep (1) 「好处」用 benefits 比较适当。advantages 比较不好。 (2) There are ... 开头的句子，怎麽看都很绕口。很像从中文直接翻译的。 Everybody knows exercise is good for one's health. However the actual benefits of regular exercise are less well-known. This article describes three ways that exercise can improve your life. : healthy via doing exercise regularly. Second, If you want to be in a good 「keep healthy」太过笼统。个人觉得应该要具体一点。不过也许这超过中级英检 的要求。 First, regular exercise prevents undesirable weight gain, or, given appropriate calorie control, can even facilitates weight loss. : shape, it is one of the great medicine much more effective than healthy (1) 「one of the greatest」 (2) medicine 和 much more ... 之间文法不正确 Second, exercises or other physical activities help you prevent a number of health problems, such as stroke, metabolic syndrome, type 2 diabetes, and so on. : products. Third, you can also make a lot of congenial friends with common : hobbies. (1) 这第三点，我觉得逻辑或文意上，有一点不通。 Last but not the least, exercise boots your energy, thereby making you a more socially attractive person. : Both baseball and basketball are my favorite sports. I had crushed on playing (1) 这第二段和第一段的连结并不好。感觉很唐突。 Speaking of myself, my favorite exercises or sports are baseball and basketball. : baseball since I saw the cartoon-Major in elementary school. I really admire (1) 过去完成式不恰当。 (2) Major 是大联盟卡通？要讲清楚，不然没人知道。 My obsession with baseball started when I was a primary school student. At the time I was a big fan of the Japanese cartoon series called "Major". : the main characters in this cartoon, their awesome performance in : competitions and friendship made me envy. I played it very hard in order to (1) really admire 时态不对 (2) in this cartoon 和 their awesome ... 之间要断句，或加上连接词。 One of the reasons that I love this cartoon so much is that the main character, Goro Shigeno, never gives up playing baseball even though his shoulder was injured. For me that was a demonstration of passion and faith for something you really like. : become the cartoons character-Honda. Although it doesn’t have many (1) 「I played it very hard...」 是说你花很多时间打棒球？老实说这句 话很不清楚。 : opportunities to play baseball now, I still watch profession games on : television. (1) 「It」 doesn't have many opportunities ... 文法有问题。 As a senior college student, I don't have too much time to play baseball anymore, but I still keep my eyes on the Major League Baseball games very closely. : On the other hand, I also like to play basketball because the sports is easy : to play for me. When I made a three-points shots, I could get much of : accomplishment from it. (1) 「On the other hand...」有点怪。和上文接不起来。「easy to play」我也 看不懂指的是什麽。 (2) 这一段没结尾。 (3) 这一整篇文章没结论。 Basketball is the other favorite sport of mine. Making a successful three-point shot can without a doubt increases one's sense of satisfaction. 要记得写结论。 Knowing the benefits of exercise is not enough, to get the benefits, you have to develop the habit of working out regularly. At the same time, remember to avoid exercise-induced injuries. ※ 编辑: hoch 来自: 120.126.36.193 (02/15 18:34)