※ 引述《jt910203 (aa)》之铭言： : 这题目是中级复试的 : 题目是要写出电子邮件对我们的影响之类的 英检作文都有比较严格的主题限制。必须确定该讲到的都有讲到。 : With the development of the Internet,e-mail is getting more and more popular, 『more and more popular』之後应该是句点。个人觉得你很多断句的地方都是 随兴式的。以这句来说，『电子邮件很普遍』和 『我们不能没有电子邮件』， 这两句我觉得不能直接放在一起，除非你有用其他的意念连接起来。 例如： With the advent of the Internet in the last ten years, electronic mail, a digital way of exchanging messages, has become so popular that most people can't live without it. : we nearly can not do any work without e-mail. For example, I am used to 『nearly』用在这很怪。查一下字典看看。 : logging my e-mail to receive some pieces of news and entertainment : information that will kill my boring time and make me relax. The most 这一句有一点绕舌。也许可以这样： Take myself as an example, upon arriving at the office, the first thing I do is to check the email, where I make contacts with my friends and colleagues, as well as receiving up-to-date information and news via the RSS web feed technology. : important function of email for me, is to hand out my papers to professors. For a college student like myself, online submitting homeworks, assignments, and projects is another indispensable capability of email. : E-mail is also playing an important role in business. For instance, in my 我觉得这句话和上一句要分段。也就是说，你现在开始要讲 email 的商业用途。这 和前面是两件事。 先点出主题句： Email also plays an important role in business operation. 再给范例： : intern company, they always use e-mail to do a lot of things like checking : the order list or businessing with clients. It can save more time and money : than traditional methods like telephone and letter. For example, one of the lessons that I learned in my summer internship at a local trading company is that, today's business correpondence is conducted exclusively via electronic mails, thereby saving tremendous amounts of time and money, comparing to traditional communication methods such as telephones and postal delivery services. : As a result, e-mail is so convenient for all of us. 结尾很弱。要想一个好的结论。 The ubiquitous indispensability of email has reshaped the world. In so many ways that our daily life has been affected by the availability of emails. I can't imagine what a disaster it would be for even one day without email. : 请各位大大帮我改一下,并且帮我看看这样的水准...复试会不会过 : 3q! 我没有考过中级，不过猜想应该会过才对。其实写得不错。 ※ 编辑: hoch 来自: 120.126.36.193 (01/30 09:25)