※ 引述《stabber111 (五楼是正妹!!!)》之铭言： : I have a 3-5 minutes lecture tomorrow, so I wrote a essay for lecture. : do I have some mistake in the essay?? : --------------------------------------------------------- : I choose "addicting drug by teenager" for my speaking topic. : because, when I was serving in the Army. I finded a friend in there. he is a : teenager. but he had defferent experience that he has have served in the : jail. : My friend was born in a crime family. His father is a crime organize's : leader. When he was very very young, he knew what drug is, and how to use it. : When he was 17, he join the jail by organize crime. After that, he left the : jail to join the Army. but he was needing to go to police office every : weekend. : If he had vacation on weekend. Now, he go back jail again. : why he always go to jail? he told me, he was very crazy when he used the : drug. He usually punch somebody, take a gun to aim someone and illegal : highspeed driving. but he might not know what he is doing. finally, he told : me, when he started to use drug, he is finished. : This story told me, don't use the drug. Hello! My English grammar isn't perfect, but I hope it helps :) Here is my correction: I chose "Teenage Drug Addicts" for my speaking topic. When I was serving in the Army, I had a friend there. He is a teenager. But he had an unique experience of serving in jail before. My friend was born in a crime family. His father is a crime organization's leader. When he was very young, he knew what drug is, and how to use it. When he was 17, he was put behind bars by organizing crime. After that, he left the jail to join the Army. But he still need to go to the police station every weekend. If he had day offs on weekends now, he has to go back jail again. Why was he put in jail? He told me he was very crazy when he used the drugs. He usually punches someone, aim a gun at people, and did illegal highspeed driving. But while he's at it, he might not know what he is doing. Finally, he told me, the moment he started to use drugs, he is doomed. This story tells me to never use drugs. p.s. I didn't change your use of words that much, and good luck^^ --

※ 发信站: 批踢踢实业坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 114.43.119.210 You're right! Thanks! I was too concentrated on grammar only, lol ※ 编辑: orannge 来自: 114.43.119.210 (04/08 21:22)