作者afl5b (咏咏)
看板EngTalk
标题[Talk] please chen the grammer and fluency
时间Sun Oct 25 22:15:51 2009
As title...
Please check the grammer and fluency.
I know that is illegal to post Chinese here.
But I have to let you know what I am talking about...
If it is not suit here, I'll delete it~
Thanks
As follow
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My name is **, it's meaning of discipline and majestic, and it's also
representative I am very strict for myself. I live in Taoyuan, there are 4
people in my family, consists of my parents and my younger sister.
我是**,我的名字有「纪律威严」的意思,这也代表着我是一个对自己要求严格的人。我
住在桃园,家中除了父母还有一位正在高中就读的妹妹。
Cause English is one of my habbits, so when I graduated from junior high, I
go study at 5 year college and major in English, then after 5 year college I
study Shipping Business of Management. thought they were very different, it
doesen't reduce this habbit, after all, shipping is an international
industry, cause I have this best tool, everythin let me proficiently,
besides, I also get the 5 place on Northern Spelling Bee contest.
国中时因为对英文有兴趣,所以毕业後我选择就读五专,主修英文;而二技时我就读台北
海院的「航运企业管理系」,虽然和专科的领域不同,但也不减我对英文的兴趣,毕竟航
运是国际性的企业,而我也因为有了英文这最好的工具,让我在课堂上更得心应手;此外
,我也靠着我的英文实力,让我获得北区「英文单字竞赛第五名」的佳绩。
When I'm in 4th grade in 5 year college, I joined McDonald's. From cleaning
the restroom to making the burgers until become a barista. During those 4
years, I'm not only learn how to treat every one, but also know the team
work.
专四开始我进入麦当劳兼职,从基层的外场服务员做起,不论是收银点餐,或是环境清洁
打扫都必需包办,直到今天成为可以独当一面的咖啡师傅,四年里我不仅学会该怎样服务
每一位顾客,更重要的是我体认到团队合作的重要性。
Althought all the experience are Service, I'd like to take new challenge,
learning new things. and I hope that you can give me a chance to show you the
best performance
. Thank you!
Fianlly, thank you all!
。虽然目前的工作经验皆为服务业,但是敝人愿意接受新的挑战、从新学起。也希望公司
能够给我一个机会让我好好的表现。
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1F:推 littlebugs:I think you can check it by MS WORD... 10/26 09:19
2F:→ littlebugs:There are few punctuation mistake in the articls. 10/26 09:22
3F:→ littlebugs:I think "English" CANNOT be a habit, but "learning 10/26 09:25
4F:→ littlebugs:English" is better. (just my personal opinion) 10/26 09:26
5F:推 applewhat:It's meaning of discipline and majestic -> 11/05 00:21
6F:→ applewhat:,which means discipline and majesty 11/05 00:22
7F:→ applewhat:Cause English is one of my habbits -> 11/05 00:23
8F:→ applewhat:Because I am interested in English, 11/05 00:24
9F:→ applewhat:strict for myself -> strict with myself 11/05 00:24
10F:→ applewhat:When I'm in 4th -> when I was in 4th 11/05 00:25
11F:→ applewhat:barista -> cashier 11/05 00:25
12F:→ applewhat:I'm not only learn how to treat every one -> 11/05 00:25
13F:→ applewhat:not only did I learn how to treat customers well 11/05 00:26
14F:→ applewhat:but also know the team work 11/05 00:26
15F:→ applewhat:but I also learned the importance of team work 11/05 00:27
16F:→ applewhat:Althought -> Although 11/05 00:27
17F:→ applewhat:all the experience are Service -> 11/05 00:27
18F:→ applewhat:all of my work experience has been in the service 11/05 00:28
19F:→ applewhat:industry 11/05 00:28