※ 引述《maximus1523 (麦西幕士)》之铭言： : Dear son/daughter : There is nothing that I need to say that you don't already know : about the significance the test mean to you. However you must not be mistakened : when I say "significance" because significance bears various facets. : When I was at your age, I, too, was in the struggle you are in now; : all that mattered in my life was all about competition and the yearning : how getting admitted by prestigious universities may change my life and make : it better. 我实在没必要帮你改，但你教英文的，英文怎麽可以写成这样 我忍不住改了一段，让你知道写文章不要连单字mistaken也错，不确定也不查字典 特别是一位英语教学者 你这是写给你学生，这本是好的原意，但你是写给"学生" 学生都看不懂，那你的本意不就只沦为卖弄 又更何况你的英文错的胡涂 如果版主觉得这篇不妥请删 (1)你第一句最後的that名词子句在第一句里无文法功能，say的受词是nothing， 而你那个that子句是你为了语意而硬塞 (2)don't already know是什麽意思?到底是已经知道还是不知道，already没有否定 (3)the significance [ the test mean to you] 你用名词子句当同位语，但显然这个 同位语并不是significance的补充说明，文法上有冲突，而且你主动不一致 可改： how significant the exam means to you 或： the significance of the exam (4)must not 是禁止，请用don't be mistaken by significance 另外mistakened是错字，只有mistaken pp当形容词用 (5)when I was your age ，没有at (6)I,TOO,WAS.. too不适合放句中，而且还马上放代名词I後面，这是外行写法，太像中文。 请用I also... (7)yearning是渴望，跟你要表达的struggle不合， 可用blind pursuit of prestigious ... (8)没有how getting 只有 how to get... (9)片语get (be) admitted to 不是by (10) may change...前应该是主词，可是你的主词却是一堆其他不能当主词的结构 --

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