目前进度大概才四分之一吧(￣▽￣＃)﹏﹏ 这次贴的进度比较多，不知道总共会有几页(抖) 但开始之前，先感谢有给建议的各位板友们 m(_ _)m (晤 前情提要? 才没几分钟哪来的前情提要( ￣ c￣)y▂ξ) --------------------------以上请忽略---------------------- SCENE #04: 第四幕 [EXT. -- DAY] [外景 – 白天] (改成扩展後感觉还是不对耶...囧) (Eric Delko is out on the boat looking for survivors. Rather than use the motor, he and another man push the boat slowly through the water, searching carefully for any lost bits and pieces of evidence.) (艾瑞克．戴可正在船上寻找生还者。他和另外一位搜救员缓慢地划着船在水上前进， 仔细寻找任何零星的证据。) (Directly in front of them are several bills on the plants. Also among the plants is a piece of a man's arm cut off.) (在他们前方有几张落在植物中的钞票。有一只被切断的男性手臂混杂其中。) (The boat pulls up along side the arm. Eric reaches down and picks up the arm out from the water. He takes a breath as he looks at it, then places it in a bag. He twists the bag shut.) (船只在断臂旁停住，艾瑞克伸手把手臂从水中取出。他看到时倒抽了一口气，然後把它 放入袋中，把袋子转了两圈封起。) (这边没看影片不知道是什麽类型的袋子，所以用阖上来形容) (He puts the bag aside, then takes flag marker 5 and sticks it in the spot where the arm was found.) (他把袋子放到一旁，取出五号标帜旗，插在手臂发现的地方。) (用"黏的"?) CUT TO: 镜头切换: SCENE #05: 第五幕 [EXT. ROAD - DAY -- CONTINUOUS] [道路上 – 白天 – 持续着] (Camera is low on the road as a set of tires pull up and stop. The driver's door opens and a woman in high heeled shoes steps out of the SUV. It's Megan Donner. She takes off her sunglasses and looks around.) (镜头定格於路边，一辆车行驶过来停靠着。驾驶座门打开，一名穿着高跟鞋的女人 － 梅根．唐那　－ 踏出休旅车。她取下太阳眼镜，四处张望。) (On the other side of the SUV, she meets up with Tim Speedle.) (在越野车的另一头，她遇见了提姆．史毕杜(注1)。) MEGAN DONNER: N.T.S.B. is on the way in. They're going to want updates -- site logistics, weather, eyewitness reports. 梅根．唐那：NTSB(国家运输安全委员会)(注2)的人在路上了，他们要求最新资讯 -- 现场後勤、天气资讯、目击证人的证词。 (logistics有物流、运筹(n.)或是计算的(adj.) TIM SPEEDLE: Welcome back, Megan. I didn't know you were going to be in this week. 提姆．史毕：欢迎回来，梅根。我不知道你这礼拜会出勤。 (She ignores his welcome and gets back to business.) (她不理会史毕的欢迎，继续谈论着工作。) MEGAN DONNER: Any survivors? 梅根．唐那：有任何生还者吗? TIM SPEEDLE: (shakes his head) Nothing new. 提姆．史毕： (摇头) 目前还没有。 MEGAN DONNER: They'll be found in the first few hours if we find them at all. How we doing on safety? 梅根．唐那：如果有任何生还者的话，这几个小时是关键。安全措施呢? (这句翻译卡卡的，特别是後面那句我无法理解orz) TIM SPEEDLE: We got it covered. 提姆．史毕：已经有准备了。 (同上，不了解梅根大姊说什麽，所以也不知道史毕回答什麽 囧) (Speedle puts a hand on her shoulder, she shrugs it off. She turns and starts walking. Speedle follows.) (史毕伸出手试着搭梅根肩膀，她不当一回事并转身走开，史毕跟上。) MEGAN DONNER: This is a level two biohazard site. We should be taking precautions. 梅根．唐那：这里是二级生化危险区，我们应该采取保护措施。 (我在翻什麽(／‵Д′)／~ ╧╧) INTERCUT WITH: 镜头交切： (Horatio instructs Calleigh.) (何瑞修正指示着卡莉) HORATIO CAINE: All search personnel should have tyvek overalls on double gloves, masks, and decontamination after every shift. 何瑞修．肯恩：所有人员都应该穿戴特卫强防护衣、两层手套和面罩，每次换班之後都要 进行消毒。 (应该是tyvek才对) CUT TO: 镜头切换： MEGAN DONNER: Everyone's up on antibiotics. The water's full of blood-borne pathogens and bacteria from body decomp, not to mention six thousand pounds of jet-A fuel. 梅根．唐那：每个人都要服用抗生素。现在水中充满了血原性病原体，还有腐屍孳生的细 菌，更不用说六千磅的喷射机油了。 (up on有精通的意思，但在这里感觉完全不对= =) CUT TO: 镜头切换： HORATIO CAINE: No shift should last more than twenty minutes. No food or water on site. 何瑞修．肯恩：每一个轮班下水的时间不得超过二十分钟，现场禁止饮食喝水。 CUT TO: 镜头切换： MEGAN DONNER: They won't be able to eat out there. Spray from the airboat props will cause contamination. 梅根．唐那：他们不可能在那吃东西的，光是汽船螺旋桨的浪花就会造成污染了。 CUT TO: 镜头切换： HORATIO CAINE: We're treating this as a crime scene which means no object too small. Any doubts, bag it and tag it. 何瑞修．肯恩：这里被视为案发现场，也就是证据不论大小，都要装袋、贴标签就对了。 CALLEIGH DUQUESNE: (nods) All right. 卡莉．杜肯：(点头) 了解。 (Calleigh turns and leaves.) (卡莉转身离开。) CUT TO: 镜头切换： MEGAN DONNER: (to Speedle) See if you can find me a copy of the flight plan. 梅根．唐那：(和史毕讲话) 看能不能给我一份飞航计画的复本。 (还是查不到flight plan的正式名称) (Megan turns and walks away.) (梅根转身离开。) TIM SPEEDLE: (calls out to her) It's nice to see you, too. 提姆．史毕：(朝她大喊) 我也很高兴再见到你。 CUT TO: 镜头切换： --------------------------先说明注解---------------------- 注1:Speedle按照发音应该是史毕杜，但决定只翻成史毕 (喊久了感觉史毕会有小肚子一样) 注2:NTSB(国家运输安全委员会)的人在路上了 这边翻译时是直接用NTSB(因为前面有先介绍过，故这边只用括号来注解) 如果按照台湾说话的习惯，也许可以翻成"运输安委会的人在路上了" 不过还是念NTSB比较像办案人员(￣▽￣＃)﹏﹏ --------------------------以上是注解---------------------- SCENE #06: 第六幕 [EXT. WATER - DAY -- CONTINUOUS] [水面上 – 白天 -- 持续着] (A diver slips off the boat and into the water. He uses the flag marker to tap the bottom of the marsh floor.) (一名潜水员滑离船只潜入水中，用旗帜插在沼泽底部做记号。) (是不是像用旗帜插在底部那样?) (Nearby, Horatio Caine kneels as he watches.) (在附近，何瑞修单膝跪下观察着。) (Megan walks up to him.) (梅根走向他。) MEGAN DONNER: You thinking bomb? (字幕稿上是Thinking a bomb?) 梅根．唐那：你认为是炸弹造成的? HORATIO CAINE: Well, the jury's still out. 何瑞修．肯恩：还不知道呢。 (我怀疑我扭曲原义...囧) (They shake hands.) (他们握手。) HORATIO CAINE: Welcome back, Megan. (She nods.) Why do you ask? 何瑞修．肯恩：梅根，欢迎归来。 (她点头) 怎麽这麽问? MEGAN DONNER: You're the expert. 梅根．唐那：你是专家啊。 HORATIO CAINE: Well, no gas washing no pitting, no thinning of metal no thermal effect. We still have to swab for RDX, PETN(注3) but I think we'll know more when the evidence comes in. 何瑞修．肯恩：恩，没有气体外泄，金属腐蚀、腐蚀或热效应。我们仍需要采集是否 有RDX(黑索金)、PETN(火药的一种)，但我想证据出现时我们会知道更多。 (我不像老何是炸弹专家，翻不出个所以然Q_Q) MEGAN DONNER: NTSB told us to hold off on recovery. 梅根．唐那：NTSB的人叫我们暂缓重建现场。 (Horatio stands and puts his sunglasses on.) (何瑞修站起，戴上太阳眼镜。) (墨镜、歪头、何公飘XD) HORATIO CAINE: Yeah, but they're not here yet, are they? 何瑞修．肯恩：但他们还没到这里，不是吗? MEGAN DONNER: Horatio, we've been through this before. 梅根．唐那：何瑞修，我们碰过这种情况了。 HORATIO CAINE: Valu-jet in '96(注4)-- I recall it well. 何瑞修．肯恩：1996年瓦卢杰航空空难 -- 我记得很清楚。 MEGAN DONNER: Then I don't need to remind you the Feds have jurisdiction over any air crash. They deputize local agencies. We're working for them. 梅根．唐那：那不用我说，你也知道联邦调查局拥有任何空难的管辖权。他们就代表了当 地的司法机构，我们在他们之下的。 (本来是翻成"我们是为他们效力的"，不过翻成这样能更凸显上下关系) HORATIO CAINE: The Everglades is a slow-moving river with a current that travels about four feet per hour. 何瑞修．肯恩：大沼泽地是条缓速河流，流速约四尺。 MEGAN DONNER: I know. The crash site is degrading while we're standing here. We're losing evidence. 梅根．唐那：我知道。当我们站在这里时，案发现场正在流失，我们正失去证据。 ("流失"好?还是"消失"好?) 我们在这边多站一秒，证据就多流失一分 HORATIO CAINE: Four feet per hour. We need to start processing right now. 何瑞修．肯恩：每小时四尺吗...我们不能等了。 MEGAN DONNER: That's not your call, or mine. 梅根．唐那：这并不是你我能决定的。 (这句很关键，但我这麽翻感觉并不对...) HORATIO CAINE: Okay. 何瑞修．肯恩：好的。 (He stops and takes off his glasses. Sirens wail in the distance.) (他停住，拿下太阳眼镜。远处的汽笛鸣叫着。) HORATIO CAINE: Listen, I am sorry for the way things turned out for you but I did not ask for this job. 何瑞修．肯恩：听着，我很抱歉发生在你身上的事情，但我没有刻意抢你的工作。 MEGAN DONNER: (nods) I know. 梅根．唐那：(点头) 我知道。 HORATIO CAINE: Anytime you want to take it back, let me know. 何瑞修．肯恩：任何时候你想回来，让我知道。 (要回这职位?) (MEGAN chuckles ruefully) (梅根轻声地苦笑。) MEGAN DONNER: That's not my call either. 梅根．唐那：这也不是我的决定。 (这句感觉和上面有呼应，有想过翻做"那也不是我能决定的"会更顺畅，只是 上面没翻好...这里也没办法好到哪去 囧) HORATIO CAINE: Until then, let's get to work. 何瑞修．肯恩：在那之前，先工作吧。 (Horatio turns and leaves. Megan stands there a moment and sighs.) (何瑞修转身离开。梅根待了一会儿，叹了口气。) CUT TO: 镜头切换 --------------------------注解线在此---------------------- 注3:RDX，又名黑索金、海扫更(英文Hexogen)，全名叫做环三亚甲基三硝胺， 是炸药的一种。 PETN，没有专门名称，只叫做季戊四醇四硝酸脂，也是炸药的一种。 这边翻译直接打出缩写，有其他名称再用括号注解 (打环三亚甲基三硝胺应该没多少人懂= =) 注4:Valu-jet in '96 为1996年发生在迈阿密的真实事件 瓦卢杰航空592号班机，在1996年5月11日下午2点04分从迈阿密的迈阿密国际机场到亚特 兰大的途中坠毁与佛罗里达州的大沼泽地中，机上110人全部罹难。 (以上资料查自维基百科) --------------------------注解线在此---------------------- SCENE #07: 第七幕 [INT. MEDICAL EXAMINER'S TENT - DAY -- CONTINUOUS] [验屍处帐篷内 – 白天 -- 持续着] (验屍处帐篷 晤?) (Inside the make-shift tent, the bodies and body parts are piled up for Alexx Woods to examine. Horatio stands next to the table with the body that she's currently working on.) (艾利丝．伍德正在临时搭建的帐篷内检查那些拼凑的屍体。何瑞修站在她工作的验屍台 旁。) ALEXX WOODS: How are we doing on survivors? 艾利丝．伍德：搜寻生还者的情况如何了? HORATIO CAINE: Not good. How many you got in here? 何瑞修．肯恩：不太好，多少人被送过来了? ALEXX WOODS: Four or five, depending on which pieces match. 艾利丝．伍德：四、五名，端看多少部分被拼凑起来。 (She's cutting the shirt off the body of a white male on the table in front of her.) (她正剪开她前方验屍台上一名白种男性的衬衫。) ALEXX WOODS: Injuries are consistent with catastrophic blunt force trauma. 艾利丝．伍德：伤口符合大型灾难造成的致命外伤。 HORATIO CAINE: Pretty normal for this type of crash, though. 何瑞修．肯恩：在这类的事故中倒是蛮常见的。 ALEXX WOODS: (to the body) Wasn't normal for you. You didn't get up this morning thinking it would be your last, did you, honey? 艾利丝．伍德：(和屍体讲话) 对你来说可不正常，今早起床你没想到这会是你的最後一 天，是吗亲爱的? (法医妈妈的习惯出现了XD) HORATIO CAINE: Ask him if he knows what brought the plane down. 何瑞修．肯恩：问他是否知道什麽造成飞机坠毁。 (She smiles at Horatio. She pushes the shirt aside and finds something on the man's chest.) (艾利丝对何瑞修笑了笑，把剪开的衬衫摆两旁，在男人的胸部发现了线索。) ALEXX WOODS: Well, I think he just might have answered your question. 艾利丝．伍德：我想他刚刚回答了你的问题。 (She shows Horatio the injury.) (她给何瑞修看了伤口。) ALEXX WOODS: Small entry wound in the upper torso. 艾利丝．伍德：在上半身有细小的侵入性伤口。 (似乎是指子弹进入的"射入性伤口") (Quick CGI POV(注5): Close up of the entry wound on the man's chest. End of CGI POV. Resume to present.) (快速电脑绘图影像观点：在男人胸部上的侵入性伤口特写。结束电脑绘图影像，回到现 在。) (Alexx lifts the body over so they can examine the back of the body. Horatio looks at the body, then he looks at Alexx.) (艾利丝将屍体翻过来检查背部，何瑞修观察後，看向艾利丝。) HORATIO CAINE: We got a through-and-through. 何瑞修．肯恩：看来是完全贯穿了。 (She doesn't say anything. Alexx pats the body and puts it back down.) (艾利丝什麽都没说，轻拍屍体并把背朝下。) HORATIO CAINE: (loud) Calleigh, please. 何瑞修．肯恩：(大声) 卡莉，请进来。 (Calleigh walks into the tent.) (卡莉走进帐棚。) HORATIO CAINE: Take a look at this. 何瑞修．肯恩：麻烦看一下这个。 (Calleigh walks up to the body and looks at the wound.) (卡莉走向屍体，观察伤口。) CALLEIGH DUQUESNE: Looks like a medium caliber. Maybe a .32 or a .38. 卡莉．杜肯：看起来是一般口径，可能是点32或点38手枪。 (这边也许翻做"中口径"，後面的手枪也不确定要不要加进去) HORATIO CAINE: And the bullet may still be lodged in the fuselage. Do you think we could find it? 何瑞修．肯恩：子弹也许还留在机身内，你想我们找得到吗? CALLEIGH DUQUESNE: (smiles) Does Elvis wear a white jumpsuit? 卡莉．杜肯：(微笑) 猫王是穿白色连身服吗? (这边我确定我完全翻错意思 囧) (Alexx smiles at the comment. Calleigh turns and leaves the tent. Horatio continues to look at the body.) (艾利丝听了莞尔一笑，卡莉转身离开帐篷，何瑞修继续观察屍体。) CUT TO: 镜头切换 --------------------------注解线在此---------------------- 注5:CGI POV = Computer Generated Images Point Of View CGI就是电脑绘图影像，比较耳熟能详的就是CG了 --------------------------注解线在此---------------------- SCENE #08: 第八幕 [EXT. -- DAY] [外景 – 白天] (Det. Eddie Delacroix interviews Jim Tigerfish.) (艾迪．德拉克洛瓦警官询问着吉姆．虎鱼。) (翻成虎鱼我想比台葛废墟(这是啥囧)好得多) DET. EDDIE DELACROIX: What else can you tell me? 艾迪．德拉克洛瓦警官：你还有其他要和我说的吗? JIM TIGERFISH: We were just out there fishing. Heard a noise-- real loud -- looked up, and boom! That's all we saw. 吉姆．虎鱼：我们只是在那钓鱼，然後听到一声巨大的声响，抬头看，就爆炸了！我们就 看到这些。 (On the side, Megan and Speedle watch.) (另一边，梅根和史毕观察着。) DET. EDDIE DELACROIX: Did you approach the plane? 艾迪．德拉克洛瓦警官：你有靠近飞机吗? JIM TIGERFISH: No, sir. We high-tailed it out of there. Called 911. 吉姆．虎鱼：没有，长官。我们匆忙跑开那里，然後打给911。 DET. EDDIE DELACROIX: And you didn't think to look for any survivors? 艾迪．德拉克洛瓦警官：你们没想到要寻找任何生还者? JIM TIGERFISH: Hey, we called you, remember? Shouldn't we get a reward, or something like that? 吉姆．虎鱼：嘿，是我们通报的，记得吗?不该颁个奖之类的感谢我们吗? (The Detective glances at Jim Tigerfish, then continues to write in his notebook. Speedle turns away.) (警官看了吉姆一眼，继续在记事本上写东西。史毕离开。) (Megan follows him. Speedle sighs.) (梅根随後跟上，史毕叹了口气。) TIM SPEEDLE: Fishing, my ass. Did you see the size of that rifle in their boat? .30-06(注6). They were poaching gators. 提姆．史毕：钓鱼，真是屁话。你有看到她们船中的来福枪大小吗?点30-06的，根本是在 猎捕短吻鳄。 (翻成屁话会不会太粗俗了...) MEGAN DONNER: There are panthers out in the glades. How do you know the rifle's not for protection? How do you know they didn't borrow the boat? Owner left his rifle inside. 梅根．唐那：在那些空地中有黑豹出没，你怎麽知道来福枪不是用来自保?你怎麽知道船 不是租来的?也许船主把他的枪留在那了。 TIM SPEEDLE: (sighs) I trust my gut. It seems pretty obvious. 提姆．史毕：(叹气) 我相信我的直觉，这看起来太明显了。 MEGAN DONNER: You sound just like Horatio. The problem with the obvious, Tim is that it can make you overlook the evidence. 梅根．唐那：你的口气听起来就像何瑞修。提姆，不在话下的问题是 － 这样容易使你 忽略证据。 ("问题如此明显...") (Megan turns and leaves.) (梅根转身离开。) CUT TO: 镜头切换： --------------------------注解线在此---------------------- 注6: .30-06，字幕稿中是Thirty-aught-six，也可做Thirty-oh-six 不过用中文念的话是"点三零零六"吗? --------------------------注解线在此---------------------- SCENE #09: 第九幕 [EXT. -- DAY] [外景 – 白天] (An officer on a boat holds a rifle, keeping his eye on the alligator in the water in front of him.) (船上的一名警官手持来福枪，密切注意着在他前方水中的短吻鳄。) (Speedle sits on the boat snapping photos of something in front of him.) (史毕坐在船中，替他前方的某些物品拍照。) (In the water, Eric rises out of the water. He lifts his mask and makes his way back to the boat. He puts something on the boat and hands a white plastic bag to Speedle. Speedle takes the bag and puts it aside. Eric heads off in another direction to continue the search.) (艾瑞克浮出水面。他脱下面罩回到船上，放置某些物品在船上，然後交给史毕 一个白色塑胶袋。史毕接过袋子放到一旁。艾瑞克转向另一方继续搜索。) (这边有个疑点，戴可都把面罩脱下来了，又到另一方去搜索....是在船上吗? 还是又潜水去了?) (Speedle looks down at the bag and wallet, evidence #A50. The wallet is open to a couple of family photos of the person's wife and children. He stares at the photos for a moment. He raises his camera and takes a photo of the wallet.) (史毕查看了袋子和皮夹，证物A50号。翻开的皮夹内是几张主人和妻子小孩的家庭照。 他注视着照片一会儿，拿起相机替皮夹拍了一张照。) CUT TO: 镜头切换 SCENE #10: 第十幕 [EXT. -- DAY] [外景 -- 白天] (Horatio and Megan kneel down on the ground looking at evidence. Horatio holds a small piece of something in his hand.) (何瑞修和梅根在地上单膝跪下查看着证据。何瑞修手中拿着某样物品的细小碎片。) HORATIO CAINE: What do you make of this? 何瑞修．肯恩：你认为这是什麽? MEGAN DONNER: Electronic fuel injector, like in my car. 梅根．唐那：电子燃油嘴，和我车里的一样。 (汽车配件的一种，应该有更专业的名词) (He holds it out to her.) (何瑞修把它拿近给梅根) HORATIO CAINE: Look closer. 何瑞修．肯恩：仔细看。 (Megan takes the piece and looks at it.) (梅根拿起碎片观察着。) (Quick close up: The numbers on the piece are scratched off. End of close-up.) (快速特写：碎片上的号码被磨平了。结束特写。) MEGAN DONNER: Serial number looks like it's been worn down. Could be strip- and-dip. 梅根．唐那：编号看起来像是被磨掉了，可能是赃货。 (完全是很白话的翻译〒△〒) HORATIO CAINE: It's a used part. Shined up, given a phony serial number, sold as new. It's an old trick. 何瑞修．肯恩：这是二手零件，磨光、刻上假序号，用新产品价钱卖出。老把戏了。 MEGAN DONNER: (looks around) I'll have Speedle look into it. 梅根．唐那：(四处观望) 我让史毕来调查这个。 HORATIO CAINE: I need Speedle here for collection. 何瑞修．肯恩：我需要他在这蒐集证据。 (She turns and looks at him.) (梅根转身看向他) MEGAN DONNER: I'll take care of it. 梅根．唐那：我来做吧。 HORATIO CAINE: Thank you. 何瑞修．肯恩：谢谢你。 (She stands up with the piece.) (梅根站起，手拿着碎片。) CUT TO: 镜头切换： ---------------------------------------------------- 进度差不多是到这里... 翻译越多越想对自己说：你在翻什麽( ‵□′)───C＜─___-)||| 这次的注解比上次多很多，还请见谅 还是感谢有右转进来观看的各位版友们 如果认为破坏了心中何公团队们或是迈阿密心中的想像时 请左转出去XD (以上玩笑话) --

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